wrote this for a girl......

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  1. TJ-

    TJ- New Member

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    ive written a lots of songs/poems in my dayz but for some reason i like this one. its about when we die we think about our loved ones.


    lessons----

    Revelance, deliverance, ignorance,

    necessary things that come in increments,

    the lies and the bullshit that were fed,

    is enough to make us whip out the lead,

    how can so many people believe,

    that we went into this war for these people to be freed,



    you can't trust anyone these days,
    i would know, for i have been betrayed,

    this nation that was once so great,

    has turned to shit for the profits to be made,

    one thing in life is all we need,
    and that is friendship, we should seek,

    that inadequacy of which,

    has made our future so damn bleek,


    i know one day the end will come,

    when our home soil is bombed just for fun,

    and when our destiny is finally brought forth,

    hopefully the lessons weve learned will not be ignored,

    for it would be a shame, to replicate this game,

    because everywhere i look, all i see,

    is the obscurity for which we believe,

    that the pleasure we seek is abundant in currency,


    the things we want are everywhere to be seen,

    but we need to forge ties with human beings,

    and forget about those damn material things,

    which cause us to create unforgettable bad dreams,

    so lord i wish to say, i thank ya,

    for the creation of a beautiful angel named Bianca,


    and when that day does arise,

    she will be the last thought on my mind,

    for she is an extraordinary find,

    i shall cherish her love and devotion,

    cause without it i would have no emotion,

    so in my last words to you i say,

    that all we need to do is pray,

    for everyone to get along, day after day...
     
  2. HardwareHeaven

    HardwareHeaven Administrator Staff Member

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    Did you write this for a specific girl, or just a girl? maybe the girl you are waiting to answer you in off topic ? :x

    Seriously though, nice to see people writing poetry.
     
  3. TJ-

    TJ- New Member

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    no man for a specific girl name bianca...
     
  4. pigdog

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    Ah yes, we Aussies do have our sensitive side you know Zardon:),
    And being a soldier in the Oz Army, I found the reference to our involvment in Iraq, and and the the way we'vew been decieved by our goverment into going there quite apt. When I was there, all I could think about was getting home to my girl and making sure we both made the most out of our good fortune in being together, and I discovered a new found appreciation for just how fortunate those of us who live in a peaceful and relatively safe country are! Unfortunately she left me as soon as she found out that despite my experiences, I was signing on for another 6 years (or at least that's what she said - personally, I think she knew that once HL2 came out, she wouldn't see me for 6 months[​IMG] )
     
  5. Calliers

    Calliers Administrator/Editor Staff Member

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    battleaxe187 dude, cool piece of lit. yo dude, i got this d8 comin up, and i was wondering if you could uh, you know, spruce things up for me by writing a little somthin-somthin for that special gal......... ;)
     
  6. Falstaff

    Falstaff Old Codger

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    it reminds me of a rap....good poetry
     
  7. pr0digal jenius

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    very nice....i gotta see if i can fidn a copy of the last little rhym thingy(not exactly a poem) i wrote for my girl.....
     
  8. TJ-

    TJ- New Member

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    no problem just send me a msg or something, let me know her name a stuff and id be glad to hook ya up
     
  9. GutterPunk

    GutterPunk I = Greatest Dood

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    Sun_walka

    Yo man, you should write it from you heart itll mean more to her

    Battleaxe187

    very nice man very nice!
     
  10. TJ-

    TJ- New Member

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    damn,, so many compliments,, this isnt even my best one,,, mabye i should put some more up here...
     
  11. Geminiwave

    Geminiwave I Have lovely Breasts

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    Yeah Battleaxe you really should.

    EVERYONE SHOULD PUT STUFF UP HERE!
     
  12. pr0digal jenius

    pr0digal jenius Delete Me

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    very much true

    my girlfriend's last birthday card was paper and crayon...lol
     
  13. BiGBrOwNPimpsta

    BiGBrOwNPimpsta HH's #1 Hustla and Pimp

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    yo this be my rymes

    YO JUBEE WE GOTTA GET OUR FREAK ON
    GET THAT THONG OFF COME ON OVER TONITE
    I JUS WANNA BANG YOU YOU

    MMMMHMM

    WE BE GOIN ALL NITE WIT THE CHAMPAGNE KEEPIN US FLOWIN
    DONT STOP TILL 6 IN THE MORNIN
     
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    TJ- New Member

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    hahahahahahahahahha
     
  16. Geminiwave

    Geminiwave I Have lovely Breasts

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    how...romantic....
     
  17. Calliers

    Calliers Administrator/Editor Staff Member

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    hey, sorry dudes, but xams up in a few, so a mans gotta be ready ;)

    Nah, i was just kidding axe, genius, punk. I wasnt really serious, the day i get a date is the day the world turns to marshmellow!!! lol :rotfl:
     
  18. YAYitsAndrew

    YAYitsAndrew Anti-Piracy Poster Boy

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    Man, a marshmallow planet would be so awesome. I'm going to write a haiku.

    Oh, marshmallow world!
    I'd love roasting you in flames
    And eating a smore.
     
  19. YAYitsAndrew

    YAYitsAndrew Anti-Piracy Poster Boy

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    Magical haiku,
    Why do you always sound deep
    When content is tripe?
     
  20. YAYitsAndrew

    YAYitsAndrew Anti-Piracy Poster Boy

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    Could this just be spam?
    Good enough to triple post?
    Wait for mod's response.
     

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